*Silent
Redemption*
And on the sixth day he rise,
Beneath the asphalt of cruel
desires
Sickened the paths of life;
Embraced the darkness, rejected
the sun
Cursed the moon
And plead for none;
He once be created
As the soul of divine,
Purest of the pure
Amongst thy kind;
Alas be thy foolishness
Greed and treachery,
Bound him in his bones
with ecstasy of slavery.
Said before, saying it again..It's the best one..But seems a little short and gives a feeling that, it's unfinished. May be, should think to add some more lines..:)
ReplyDeletewell to me it has already a classic and can't seem to jeopardize the balance.. i know what u mean, but some things are better unfinished so it lets the mind of the reader wondering and build their own notions around it. . . but i hear u brother and thnx for the suggestion
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